Weekend Writing Warriors- Chapter 5b Snippet


It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

So, last week we saw Kendryk barging in on Julia Maxima. I was just going to move on to Chapter 6, but it didn’t seem very nice to leave all of you hanging without giving you a tidbit of the lengthy conversation that followed the barging.

Since It’s hard to pick eight sentences out of this that make any sense at all, I’ll give you a bit of a summary.

Kendryk really doesn’t believe Father Landrus should be arrested at all, and would like to call a public council to have an open discussion about the issues he’s raised. Julia does not agree. To make things worse, she’s already let the Empress know about all of this, so she and Kendryk aren’t at liberty to do what they think is best. Normally, a troublemaker like Landrus would be shipped off, tried somewhere far away and never be heard from again, but there are political reasons that make this a bad idea. They finally compromise by deciding to request a public trial on neutral ground.

Kendryk asks:

“What happens to Father Landrus in the meantime?”

“I had thought to keep him here only a short time before sending him to Atlona, but I can keep him in my dungeon for a few months, if that will help.”

“Could I have him instead?” Kendryk asked. “Not that I don’t trust you,” he added. “But I think his congregation might be less offended.” He didn’t say it, but he hated the idea of never speaking with the priest again, which would be a certainty if he was imprisoned here. He also wanted to make sure no accidents would befall him before he could be taken to trial.

After a second’s hesitation, Julia nodded.

Previous excerpts can be found here.


26 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors- Chapter 5b Snippet

  1. Oooooh, interesting. So at this point in the story the reader doesn’t know why Kendryk wants Lazurus for himself? You kind of explained it here, but not really, which may be beneficial for the story. My curiosity is certainly piqued 😉

    1. Hopefully, the reader reading the whole story will have an idea, although Kendryk isn’t completely clear on his reasons- he just knows he wants to keep the guy alive. I think the chapter 2 snippet mentions some political reasons, but there’s more to it. Now that you mention it, I might have to go back and post a snippet of the conversation Kendryk had with Landrus in chapter one. It’s hard to get a story across in eight sentences!

    1. Julia is pretty pragmatic and from past experience, thinks she can manipulate Kendryk by giving in to him on little things. She might be wrong this time. 🙂

  2. I enjoyed your 8! I like that there’s hesitation with Julia. Makes me wonder if she trusts Kendryk. And, I like that Kendryk asked for what he wanted (of keeping the prisoner). It makes me wonder if later on in the story, he’ll try to help him escape or something. All depends on how charming the prisoner is.

    Keep smiling,

    1. Thanks for your comments! Kendryk and Julia have a mostly friendly but somewhat uneasy history, an on top of that, there aren’t a lot of trustworthy people in their world. That prisoner’s charm is going to cause a whole lot of problems. 🙂

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