Weekend Writing Warriors- Chapter 5 Snippet


It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. This week, there are 58! Lots of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

After detouring to Kaleva for the past few weeks, we’re back in Terragand with Kendryk. Julia Maxima- the highest cleric in the land- has just had Father Landrus arrested, and Kendryk has decided to intervene. He and Count Faris-his chief adviser- have just pushed past Julia’s guards, and into her private study. Greylen is Julia’s secretary.

“Prince Kendryk is here to see Her Holiness,” Count Faris said, as the door opened.

Greylen opened and closed his mouth a few times,but no sound came out. He looked like a trout gasping for air, and Kendryk had the sudden urge to laugh. Before he embarrassed himself, he swept off his hat and handed it to Greyeln, then stepped into the room, flinging his cloak back so the secretary had no choice but to take it.

Julia had already risen from behind a gigantic, ornate desk carved in ebony, and Kendryk kept his eyes fixed on hers. “I apologize for bursting in on you, Your Holiness, but  I must speak with you immediately.”

He nodded toward Greylen, who had put Kendryk’s outerwear on a chair, and now stood near the door, wringing his hands. “Alone.”

Previous snippets below:

Chapter One
Chapter Two
Chapter Three
Chapter Four


23 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors- Chapter 5 Snippet

  1. Ooooh, now I’m curious to see how the meeting goes between Julia and Kendryk. I kind of forgot the previous parts, so I’m not sure who is the antagonist, but I could feel the tension between the two of them.

    I liked this line, “Greylen opened and closed his mouth a few times,but no sound came out. He looked like a trout gasping for air, and Kendryk had the sudden urge to laugh.” It’s a great description 😀

    Looking forward to finding out how the meeting goes!

    1. Thank you! Julia is sort of the antagonist because she arrested Kendryk’s pet preist, but they have a fairly good relationship. I was going to move on to the next chapter next week, but I might have to give you a snip from the very, very long conversation they’re about to have. 🙂

    1. Thanks so much! He’s pretty used to servants catching his stuff as he throws it off, bu this was quite deliberate. 😉

  2. Love the interactions here. There seems to be an implied power play with the secretary – does Kendryk know from experience that he has to treat Greylen so firmly to keep him in his place?

    1. This isn’t Kendryk’s first confrontation with Julia, and in the past both she and Greylen have been a bit patronizing because of Kendryk’s youth, so he’s laying it on a little thick. 🙂

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